Personal Statement: Did I Better?

When it comes to handing in my papers I am never the most confident person. I dread the due dates of most writing assignments. Every time I feel like I have done some great work of writing the grade is always lower than expected. I got to a point where I just wanted to give up because I felt like my writing was way below par. I could not do anything right; every time I received a paper back it was filled with negative markings. In till I figured out something I could be proud of. I put my heart in to everyone of my papers. College is about finding your passion and thinking outside of the box. I always chose the most difficult things by going outside the norm to pick my own topic. I want to be different and write about stuff that was dear to me and stuff I could get personal about. Even though my passion did not always transaction into the grades I wanted, I still am proud that I stood up for writing for passion and not for a grade. Every time I get my paper back I feel that if I would have written about one of the chosen topics I would have did better. I did not let that get to me though I kept writing about the topics I had a motive to write about. At least I have that to look back on and

I feel towards the beginning of the year, my work was more planned out, edited to not exactly the full extent, since a work can never be perfect. My first paper, I used all the peer reviews given to me and then your edits as well. By the end of a paper I would usually have 2 drafts. One for my peers, then I edit it and show it to you for you to edit. So after those two I would turn in my final. I feel I filled each of my assignments expectations and wrote everything in the right tense at the right length. My writing performance improved since the beginning of the semester. I started by making like quick points and doing the basic 5 paragraph essay. Now I know you can make a stronger point without using the basic writing style learned in high

My work with writing has always been some kind of issue for me in a way, but in some weird way I have always enjoyed it. Throughout this course I built more skills in my writing than ever before, I got better reading and writing skills, and I was able to get some successful essays while using proper grammar. English has always be some kind of struggle for me in high school that I had to take tutoring for a couple years in it, but with the marks I have got so far in this class I’m pretty impressed about how far I have come with my grades in this course, than what I got when I was in high school English class. At the beginning of this course, for my “This I Believe” final draft, I put the best effort I could do into

I never truly understood the meaning of writing an essay. Well, that is, until I came to college. Right away I was given a writing portfolio. Most people in the class knew what that meant but I didn’t and that made me feel as if I shouldn’t be there. But I decided that I won’t give up. I want to get farther than anyone in my family. Which should be easier since no one in my family went to college. I had plenty of problems in the beginning of the year because I was new to the idea of living on my own and providing for myself. I wasn’t familiar with all of the work that I had to do in such a short time. Which made adjusting to college difficult

This semester, I gained several new responsibilities and became more involved in my global and local community. I have my driver’s license, I got my first job at Gap, and I joined two clubs, one of them being Interact. Interact Club is a club for teenagers that focuses on trying to solve issues that they’re passionate about. English 1A was only for one semester; this meant that we took our final exam at the end of the semester. Final exams for a college class were like nothing I’d ever experienced before. We had four essay prompts to choose from to write our exam on and they were given a week in advance. We had the chance to fully draft and finalize our exam before the actual exam date and then we could bring it in, copy it down, and turn it in. I took advantage of this glorious opportunity; I decided to write about the “warm glow” effect and had my mom and smart friend edit it. Even though I thought that the final exam wasn’t my best work, I ended up receiving a 95% on it. This assignment best demonstrated a growth in my responsibility this semester because I had to utilize my skills as a driven and committed student. I did my essay ahead

I felt like after I got my professors feedback I was able to grow and get further on what I was trying to discuss on my essay. Since then I have been able to unfold a series of ideas including a strong thesis. I started of with no guidance where now I have more control of the way I develop all throughout my essay using my rubric. While much has helped me, I have made tried to make it a habit to use all lessons I have received throughout this quarter in all my essays. I've learned to make a mediocre essay into a well composed interesting piece of work. My paragraphs contain flow of thoughts composed of my point, idea and example. I will keep challenging myself to compose an essay that is well thought out and interesting. I feel I still need some work in my punctuation but that's something I will have to spend more time just focusing on that specific

Today, I have higher expectations from myself. In the past, I had a tough time beginning my papers, therefore leading to procrastination. Now, I take my time in constructing an outline and organizing my thoughts. This class has also taught me a better understanding of the revision process. I have improved my writing with the help of others. Constructive criticism has played a vital role in improving my writing. I learned that my writing needs major improvement but as I receive feedback, I will become a better writer. In the beginning, I did not feel any pressure when it came to turning in papers because I thought my writing exceeded expectations. I came to realize that I needed to take my time in order to organize my thoughts and use better

Last semester had its favorable moments, even though I wasn’t doing well in some of my classes, I actually enhanced my writing skills which led me to do well in my COM 100 class. Every essay I turned in would earn at least an 80. For my COM 100 class, I always handed in my assignments on time. If I had a reason to not hand in my assignments in on time, I would always let my professor know ahead of time. Along with this, I attended my classes. If had to miss a classes, it was only once or twice. Then the next day I would always ask my teacher if there was anything I needed to review for the class. Another favorable moment from last semester, I found myself participating and answering questions that were given by the professors. Along with the

At the beginning of the semester, my writing skills weren't adequate. This can be seen on my first essay. My ideas were solid,

On November 21, 2017 I made the biggest mistake in my academic career. I turned in a crap essay to a college level class. I received a “B” and that is the lowest I have ever scored on an essay. This experience has taught me a lot though, it showed me my strengths and weaknesses when writing. I have learned that my writing is best when I am motivated because I am intrigued by the topic I am writing about. On the other hand my writing is the worst when it is rushed, like my “Transcendentalism and American Romanticism”essay. My writing also takes a hit because I have a hard time changing my writing based on others suggestions and my ignorance to commas.

I increased my effort, but even then, I still did poorly, mainly with AICE Economics and AP Government. These two classes I have taken showed that tremendously as to where I have stood from other students. And, I just could not handle them, but I was too stubborn to really care. I tried to focus on those classes, but even then, my results were just mediocre. I just could not handle it? Did I learn? No I did not, I just wanted to make it up at the moment of where I am at. It was too late. I was below expectations, and I knew it. I knew I was kidding myself, believing that I should have been in the class, when my results show me otherwise. I really don’t know what one thing I could have done better, other than just the collective answer: myself. I should have done so many more things to prepare, I should have asked to my teacher or classmates specifically what I did wrong, instead of just thinking I what have done wrong individually. It was mainly out of embarrassment for myself. I thought so highly of myself, when I wasn’t, I became so conceited of where I am at, when I should have asked for help, when I should have been more focused, when I should understand, that sometimes I couldn’t get it all. I can improve all I want, and work more later on in life. But, even then, with all that work and effort feeling gone. And that I want to make it up, all I get is a result, a result that just would not be fixed with the effort I

My personal statement will talk about how I will be the first sibling to attend college and how I love being in the kitchen. I love trying making new desserts and new dishes. If my mom and family love them, then they would put it on the menu of our restaurant. The restaurant name is called Limon. My grandmother had a restaurant as well and she taught my mother how to cook. Now my mom teaches me how to cook, I enjoy how my mother passes down my grandmother's dishes. I think my grandma would appreciate that my mom is doing that. I think later on in life I would want a restaurant of my own. I have so many wishes in life, but in order to make that happen, I would have to be successful in life and continue going to school.

What I learned is you can set a goal and tell yourself it’s easy but in reality it’s not. It’s expensive you would have to work really hard in life. I learned you would have to get things you need first not what you want. Well you can get what you want but until your settle down and have money left over. Then you can get things you

I do not have a rough draft of my essay. Regardless, I understand how I have improved in my writing skills compared to the beginning of the year. It would take me hours to write a paper. I could not write a single sentence unless it was exactly how I wanted it. When I wrote the Iliad prompt, I tried a new approach and composed what I thought and edited it later. I did not feel distressed over this paper, instead I was confident I could finish the prompt easily. When I finished, I emailed my brother the essay to edit it. When it was returned, he only corrected a few grammar mistakes and told me to edit it before I sent it. Then, I reread my essay and realized what I wrote was a poor essay. It contained a ton of errors and the sentences did

I believe education is a powerful and important asset to human development. Society depends on the education of our youth today and also on trying to educate students to be responsible and considerate to others. Teachers today are faced with teaching children to understand who they are in themselves and in society. An individual's development is based on their education through out their childhood. Education is the challenge to give a firm foundation for future growth. Knowing how to be an affective teacher, where the students can understand and learn is the most significant factor of being a teacher.