Critiquing Thesis Statement

In this chapter, Lunsford details the planning and drafting process for a writer to organize their ideas with either a formal outline or a rough plan. Lunsford reminds writers to be flexible during the drafting process and not to think twice about changing elements of the essay at this point in the process. Lunsford goes on to explain the qualities academic paragraphs must have these include unity, development and coherence. To obtain unity within a paragraph all sentences should relate to the topic sentence of the paragraph. When developing a paragraph it is important to switch between general and specific ideas in the paragraph, while supporting those ideas with details, evidence and examples as required. Ensuring a paragraph is coherent is crucial when developing an academic paragraph. Because readers need to be able to follow a writers ideas easily, Lunsford gives her readers a method to follow to achieve this goal. This method includes using the general to specific ideas, repetition, parallel structures, and using transition words. The author notes that this method should also be used to link paragraphs

The Little Seagull Handbook, by Richard Bullock, Michal Brody, and Francine Weinberg, is a book full of advice on the writing process. The book is divided up into sections which help’s students to easily find the topic they are searching for. Section W-4e on opening and closing paragraphs was used to improve my conclusions. I do not have a lot of trouble with conclusions, but I feel that mine do not fit as smoothly into my essays as they should. Therefore I decided that I needed to improve my conclusions. The section lists out several tactics to form a conclusion, such as, summarizing the essay, discussing implication of the essay’s argument, and giving a call to some kind of action. Reading the section has given me several ideas for how to end an essay. Now I can either plan which tactic to use ahead of time or

1. Paragraph One - Introduction (include a lead/hook, set the context for the essay, give the three main ideas, thesis statement is last sentence)

Identify the hook in the introduction and highlight it [yellow]. Does the hook draw the reader in to the essay in an engaging way? Make a note if it does not.

| The introductory paragraph provides a preamble, states the essay topic and provides a statement of how the argument will be organized. Some of the above is not clear though.(7.5-8)

Nunnally states its purpose to “provide[s] for effective inculcation of concepts such as unity, coherence, and development (Nunnally).” The model is structured to unite each paragraph to each other by using a thesis statement paragraph, three supporting paragraphs for said idea and finally, to summarize your essay. The use of transitional words allows the author to smoothly connect each paragraph and idea. Finally, the model develops chronologically. The author will introduce, prove and conclude. The five-paragraph model fulfills its purpose for the inexperienced writers

As my ninth-grade English teacher, Mrs. Newton would say, without a good hook to start your essay, no one will ever read it. As I was taught, a hook is a crucial part in your essay because it will help grab the audience’s attention so that they will continue to be invested throughout the paper. For example, the hook could be a question or a quote about the overall topic of your essay. In my junior year, we had to do a controversial essay and I used a quote from a famous tattoo artist as my hook because I did my essay over tattoos and piercings. After the hook, the introduction begins to take form and show the audience what your essay is about. The introduction is the first thing in your essay that will tell the audience what the essay is about. The introduction paragraph should be as interesting as the initial hook and keep the audience invested in the paper. It will establish the basis of the essay and should contain the thesis statement. The thesis statement is the point in your essay where you will state the topics that the essay will contain. In high school, we were taught that the thesis should contain the three points that you will elaborate upon in your three body paragraphs: the weakest point, the middle point, and the strongest point.

Does the job of clearly defining the topic covered in the essay and the specific aspects which will be discussed. See in particular last sentence of introduction. ( We will be looking at the structure of introductions more specifically in another class. )

Introduce my topic get the readers attention by starting the essay with a good catching attention getter, and follow through with background information about the topic

Next, your are ready to start writing your actual essay. Your intro should not be more than three to four sentences; the purpose is for you to summarize your topic. For your introduction you need to have a good hook and a thesis

1:The Title of my essay and the introduction are of great importance, because my title is my first tool I use to captivate my audiences attention. It is a chance for me to demonstrate my literacy. Having a solid introduction and is a continuation from my title. It further entices my reader by setting up the significance of my material, and afterwards stick to that material all through the essay. My introduction likewise is expected provide my reader with a "guide" of where my article is going, and of what it will cover.

After a simply and shortly begging, the heart of an article is body of explain mainly statement. At this parts writer must ponder over, and figure out logical and comprehensive outline to ensure thesis statement are expressed clearly and smoothly. Then use maybe two or three paragraph

1.Starting with a hook. In order to persuade readers to continue reading, an effective introduction needs to grab their attention. To do this, an introduction can use one or more of several techniques-it can start with an objective statement, make reference to a surprising scene or situation, start with rhetorical question, start with a problem that needs a solution. The second sentence should tell the reader more about the topic without providing background information, which leads to a thesis statement. Usually, the introductory paragraph gives the main idea and the supporting arguments of the essay, each of them will become

Third but not least, the conclusion provides an almost mirror image of the introduction, wrapping up the arguments with a restatement of the thesis of your essay. I call this the bottom burger bun or in other words the conclusion. Holding it all together is the bottom bun of the hamburger or the conclusion to sum up all the key points of interest. The conclusion sentence should be interesting by giving it a call to action. As you can see a hamburger is easy to make like writing is not as hard as you think. Writing is very simple to do as preparing a hamburger.

Finally, a conclusion paragraphs function is to summarize the main points of the essay. Davids, instead, chooses this time to add another point to her persuasion, talking about the great expenses of an extended school day. She chose not to summarize the original ideas what so ever, leaving the reader only to guess that the essay was over. If it wasn’t for the fact that it was the last paragraph published, the reader would have never been able to label it as the