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Chater 4 Essay

Decent Essays

Nayibe Lara
Instructor Pamela Archer
Business Communications

Page 133, 4.1 Audience Benefits and the “You” View (Obj. 3)

Your Task. Revise the following sentences to emphasize the perspective of the audience and the “you” view.
a. To avoid suffering the kinds of monetary losses we have experienced in the past, our credit union prohibits the cashing of third party checks presented by our members.

In order to protect you from suffering monetary losses, our credit union prohibits the cashing of third party checks presented by our members.

b. To help us process your order with our new database software, we need you to go to this Web site and fill out the required customer information.

To complete your order with our new …show more content…

According to our telephone conversation of April 1, we are sending to your Oakdale office in separate cover the printer toner and supplies.

b. Kindly inform the undersigned whether or not your representative will be making a visitation in the near future.

Please inform the undersigned whether or not your representative is visiting in the near future.

c. It is recommended that you conceptualize and submit your departmental budget ASAP.

It is recommended that you make and submit your departmental budget as soon as possible.

d. BTW, we’ve had some slippage in the schedule but don’t have to scrap everything and start from ground zero.

By the way, we have made some changes in the schedule but you don’t have to scrap everything and start from the beginning.

e. To facilitate ratification of this agreement, your negotiators urge that the membership respond in the affirmative.

In order to make the ratification of this agreement easier, your negotiators urge that the membership agree.

f. She didn’t have the guts to badmouth him 2 hz face.

She didn’t have the courage to correct him in front of everyone.

Page 134, 4.4 Bias-Free Language (Obj. 4)
Your Task. Revise the following sentences to reduce gender, racial, ethnic, age, and disability bias.
a. Any applicant for the position of fireman must submit a medical report signed by his physician.

Any applicant for

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